this author has 2 stories with this title... one story is in winglin and the other one is in ygladies...
i read both...but im commenting on the one which is posted in winglin first...
Hello is one of the longest fics i've ever read... it's not finished yet, but it's sooo long...
the style of the writing is SCRIPT form...
honestly speaking, i don't like this style (sorry dear)...
it tends to be dragging...
and... also, the events happen so fast that i have to reread some chapters just to make sure i didn't skip a part...
the idea is great...it's just...the writer needs more....practice perhaps?
i realized that she's in ygladies too, so visited her page...
i found out that she's 13...
dear...don't consider this commentary as something bad, but consider this as something that will make you a better writer someday...
(but...i read your latest chapter dear...it seems to me that seung-ri and his gf had a fight...if you include me in the fic as seung-ri's new girlfriend, i will delete this post and write a better and nicer commentary...hahaha...<--- im just kidding...)
also, just keep on writing dear... like i said, you're young... you still have more time to improve... (what i'm saying is... YOU HAVE THE POTENTIAL TO BE A GREAT FAN FICTION WRITER ONE DAY)...
at least, your English is not bad...lol...
(that's the important thing...hehe...at least we can understand what you're writing...)
if i rate this fic...i'll give 3 stars...
~OBLI aka mrs lee seung-ri